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Aspen Way

15 Feb

Aspen Way North Hampton, New Hampshire—street lights brighten the snow plowed—snow drifted piles of glistening crystal borders— crunches my path to the main street store below my feet — under full moon— I go to get milk and bread hearing thundering waves and the coming storm.

winter upon us

darkness will always prevail

until I return.

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Posted by on February 15, 2016 in Haibun Poetry

 

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19 responses to “Aspen Way

  1. moondustwriter

    February 15, 2016 at 8:40 pm

    Be safe in this cold stuff

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  2. Mary

    February 15, 2016 at 8:50 pm

    Hi ZQ, I would guess your poem was inspired by the Mary Oliver quote! You have set a fine scene. I can see those snow piles under the full moon. Darkness seems to last long this season of the year.

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  3. Grace

    February 15, 2016 at 9:01 pm

    We are in the midst of polar winter ourselves ~ I hope the lights and warmth will prevail over the darkness ~

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  4. Victoria C. Slotto

    February 15, 2016 at 9:05 pm

    Wonderful contrast in this thanks to your well-phrased descriptions. I am in the California desert, enjoying 80 degree + weather. Sorry.

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  5. whimsygizmo

    February 15, 2016 at 9:43 pm

    I can feel that crunching path beneath my feet. Good stuff.

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  6. Bodhirose

    February 15, 2016 at 10:38 pm

    I could hear the snow crunching under your feet and picture the scene under the streetlights, and I wanted you to hurry home and beat the coming storm!

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  7. thotpurge

    February 15, 2016 at 11:07 pm

    darkness will always prevail …. I’m wondering the use of “always” implies a much deeper meaning to this piece…

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  8. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    February 16, 2016 at 12:56 am

    The scene is alive with that sense of winter, with the crunch of snow under your feet.

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  9. writersdream9

    February 16, 2016 at 7:43 am

    The foreboding and preparations for what is to come are very clear in your wonderful words!

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  10. MarinaSofia

    February 16, 2016 at 8:20 am

    Full moon on snow makes for a wonderful, if eerie kind of brightness. There is something very slightly sinister about the scene you created, then comforting with the bread, milk, the lights of the store (implied). And I too wonder about the use of ‘always’ in your haiku.

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  11. ebbtide

    February 16, 2016 at 11:58 am

    love the sense of place in this one 🙂

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  12. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade)

    February 16, 2016 at 4:38 pm

    You created an atmosphere most vividly.

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  13. georgeplace2013

    February 16, 2016 at 5:07 pm

    I’m right there with you in this snowy mess.

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  14. dabrnone

    February 16, 2016 at 7:15 pm

    I love to walk on crisp fresh fallen snow in the glow of the moon. This has captured that exhilarating feeling!

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  15. trishwrites1

    February 16, 2016 at 11:08 pm

    a moonlit walk in the snow – lovely!

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  16. kaykuala (@hankkaykuala)

    February 17, 2016 at 10:26 am

    I go to get milk and bread hearing
    thundering waves and the coming storm.

    One can make a brave decision if it means survival is at stake!

    Hank

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  17. humbird

    February 18, 2016 at 6:25 pm

    yep, return is always warm…

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  18. Colleen Redman

    February 18, 2016 at 9:43 pm

    Until I return save it. Always good to have a back door and to know that what turns also returns.

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  19. vbholmes

    February 19, 2016 at 10:03 am

    Interesting that you mention “street lights”, glistening crystal” and “full moon”, but speak of darkness always prevailing in your haiku. Sounds like there’s more to this piece.

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